- The strengths of my partner's essay are definitely the suspense of the final race, the devastation his injuries caused him (his expression of this), and his use of a timeline for the story's events.
- Improvements that my partner could make are the grammar structure of some sentences, and the use of description of the environment.
- I enjoyed the personification of his times, for he was racing against them when he had no other rivals.
- The part which stood out as the catchiest was his race where he got in 3rd against Jack and Albert. I felt that it was the most intense part which kept me reading to see what would happen.
Friday, January 27, 2012
A response to my partner's blog
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1 My partner strengths were how he describe the events because he made the events seem like they just happened.
ReplyDelete2 Use some dialogie
3 There wasn't a literary device that caught my eye
4 The part that stands out most is when the convention was ending and they stood up and shouting.